Not a word from my pen in two months, and this--what do you think, too much?

You too, Alobar? I, too, have not written anything for a couple of months (I miss my muse so much)

This is you!....You are the deceased for whom taps is played. This is a wonderful poem...the pacing is just right and the images you create are as clear as if I was watching the scene, and they evoke a strong emotional response in me.

There has to be one criticism....sorry for this.

My pedantic, English upbringing makes me wish for a change to one line

'and timeless songs we all know the words to' (old teacher's voice 'Never end a sentence with a preposition!)

'and timeless songs the words of which we know'....which has the added bonus of being strongly rhythmical too.

This was a lovely, lovely read. Thank you

The first stanza is maybe a little "much," before you hit your stride. "She is twenty-seven/and she is grace" is beautiful, and your imagery from there on is lovely. I disagree with the person who said take out the fourth stanza--it brings some conflicting elements in the poem, and gives it much more of a unique tone than "This is my wife standing in a field, isn't she lovely." The only part I'm not especially fond of is the last two lines, but they aren't BAD--just not as strong an ending as a strong poem like this COULD have.

You haven't lost your voice I see. I get the image of her at a funeral standing to honor someone fallen from the war and you are like a distant observer reflecting on the scene and her. Obvious the emotion of love permeates your words. A good write, I enjoyed.

Lucky Lady, Lovely poem of a captured moment.

Very powerful - it evokes a Memorial Day service. I have always been grateful that all the members of my family who have served in the military returned home alive and (more or less) sane.

Where have you been? I was thinking the other day it was time to put out an APB on you.

It's a lovely, heart-wrenching write. I always cry when you write about her.x.

i think it's a very good poem,

i really like the last stanza,

very powerful (:

i like it all,

but if i have to be honest,

i think you should maybe take out the

fourth verse?

i think it would make the poem more peaceful,

but if you want to keep that bit so you have

contrast, i can see why.

a very good poem! (:

ALOBAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Where the hell have you been???

You have evoked feelings in me with this. I like "quiet whimpers, deadened muffled thuds."

Just sounded right to me.

Not a word in two months and you have been missed! I see a funeral for someone as they used to be...but time has moved on past that person as she was....

(Allowing the tears to roll unattended to)

S I G H

Thanks for the reminder

and the rememberance

good Q :)