If you found a ruby in the ocean, would you throw it back?

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My Unadorned Heart

I wash the collected jewels in the ocean 

The green one
the yellow one
the red one

The smell of salt water
somehow
causes the sparkle to be even more intense,
to delight beyond delight,
to enrapture

I stroke each jewel like a mother, her babe,
feeling the sensual smoothness of the sides
the sharpness of the edges
and the fading moisture… like memory

What do you make me feel?

And you?

And you?

Each jewel is unique
and sparkles hypnotically, like a star
a hand-held star

Each jewel’s colour is rich, full and defining
touching my heart in its own way
shading me, melding with my nature, creating me anew

I wear each colour upon my face for a time
see how it reacts to moonlight

And somehow
at sometime
each eventually dulls and begs me
return to the sea.

Jeff Jacob Lourie · Accepted Answer

It seems you kept one, because you sound jaded.

Anonymous · Answer

Well I don't say this often, but I feel like you have talent. I think what hundreds of people try to do on here every day and (when I read their stuff I cringe) you are able to pull off. The writing is clear, playful, and has feeling. Your use of jewels is strong, and it has inspired me to write a poem about two jewels i know and love that i keep in a sack that i was born with.

Coop 366 · Answer

Just part of life, we search and find a jewel only to give it up again.

watermelon fox · Answer

This is really good, great imagery!  The only line I don't agree with is
"I stroke each jewel like a mother, her babe..." It just doesn't sound right to me.  Perhaps you could use a metaphor for two lovers instead?  Just a suggestion.

Would you mind answering my question please?  http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20090608183753AA7XGQt&r=w

Dr. Blowenschnietzel · Answer

just sell the jewel when your done with it!  you spent all that time washing them and wearing them on your face, shouldn't you get something?

Sandy Giggles · Answer

sometimes the greater part of love is letting them go...

see if they return.


Excellent write.  I felt the colours rich life giving characters.

Anonymous · Answer

I'd praise God for it and probably keep it.

If you found a ruby in the ocean, would you throw it back?

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