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Expectant Father

How great is Man!
How great will Man become?
A staircase I see
to the stars
with each of us, everyone
a chance
to climb
and to see
the very face of God.

How great is Man!
How great will Man become?
From cesspools and squalor
from tiny babe
and from violent holler
noble Man will rise,
I pray I will see such a day,
such a bloom of flower,
such a Spring.

How great is Man!
How great will man become?
Will he ever echo the potential
contained in the gleam 
of the child’s eye,
and will I the father proud
see the evolution
be allowed
the joy of 
Mankind’s ascension to the altar 
of his own promise?

Anonymous · Accepted Answer

Form is wonderfully correct, you write well, a bit optimistic about the nature of mankind for my taste, but a good write all the same.

Anonymous · Answer

i'm no longer a meter guy or woman the two. i might ask you for help. i like the content cloth and how you have arranged this poem. what's amazing is that the rhyme isn't forced. It reads easily and easily..

♪♫NancyLiz ® ♫♪ ™ · Answer

I read that that the child at that point in his life looks to the father or mother with very high expectations and belief, and we have to work diligently to ascend to the place they have put us. 

having said thus I realize at some point we fall out of that gaze and it takes much to regain that which we had lost but it is usually stronger for having made the effort.

form is easy to read.

Sandy Giggles · Answer

Form makes the reading smooth and easy.

Content--the age old struggle of a parent to live up to child's trusting eyes...

Anonymous · Answer

Content: What I think I'm reading is - will we evolve to be good enough ever for ourselves or for our children.
Form: I like the form.

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